I didn't like this book the first time that I read it and then I read it a second time and I liked it a little more. The good news is that I had less issues with this book than I did with the first one.
The good news is that I didn't have forty problems with this book like I did with book 1. I would give this book a 3 star review maybe even a 4 star.
In the prologue on page 8 Melissa is described with having mousy blonde hair but in book one it says she has platinum hair. Then on page 10 'I wondered why the maintenance man hadn't fixed that yet; isn't that their job?' It should be maintenance men so that the entire sentence is plural and not singular and then plural. On page 11 'his arm drew back before coming fist first into my gut.' Why write that it is fist first, why not just say that she got punched? The second problem on this page is that she is being held up by her throat so being backhanded wouldn't knock her to the ground if she didn't get released and it is never said that she was released.
Chapter 1: On page 15 wrist should be plural.
Chapter 2: Nette is spelled wrong again, it should be Nettie.
Chapter 3: Page 34 says Beast shoulder's but it should be Beast's shoulder's.
Chapter 6: Page 45 '. . . dumping the rubbish from out nasty.' It should be our not out.
Chapter 8: On page 66 it says that Shelby has blonde chin length hair but in book one, although Shelby is described with different hair colors she is never described with short hair.
Chapter 13: Melissa now has light blonde hair on page 91, what happened to the mousy blonde from the prologue? On page 94 it says that Layla managed to free a wrist to grab the scissors but I think wrist should be plural since she has two.
Chapter 14: Page 98 Melissa now has white blonde hair.
Chapter 17: Page 114 'a snare coming out of her mouth.' It should be snarl.
Chapter 19: On page 130 ". . . war isn't over;it's only just begun." There should be a space before the word "it's".
Chapter 20: Page 138 ". . . turns me on, but I don't trust him." There doesn't need to be a comma between the words on and but.
Chapter 21: On page 144 we are given Jada's perspective and she is saying that she didn't understand why she had been bought there. Jada wasn't bought by the Army, she was brought there when she was a child. Then, on page 146, Hella is described as brushing his naked chest against Melissa and then taking his shirt off. How can someone take their shirt off if they were just shirtless?
Chapter 26: On page 182 'his laugh echoed through the kitchen'. It should be echos instead of echoed. Then Hella is saying what he puts in his pancakes, ". . . protein powder, and cinnamon." There doesn't need to be a comma there.
Chapter 27: Page 190 there are three times where the wrong pretense of the word is used. Yelled should be yell, swallowed should be swallow and kissed should be kisses.
Chapter 28: Page 190 'he hands fly up in the air.' It should be her hands.
Chapter 30: Page 198 it says that Eddy has a girlfriend and then on page 202 Melissa says it is his wife.
Chapter 31: On page 208 'I'm in love with him, and there is nothing I can do about it'. There doesn't need to be a comma here.
Chapter 33: On page 220 instead of shot back the liquor it should be shoot. Then on page 222 'feel Hella's gaze on mine.' It should be me instead of mine.
Chapter 35: Page 240 '. . . a brother from one of the other chapter asks'. It should be chapters not chapter. Then on 242 the writing pretense changes from present to past tense.
Chapter 36: On page 254 'a growl to escape mine'. It should be 'a growl to escape me'. Then on 255 instead of made his way out the door it should be makes.
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