**Spoilers in this review**
I had a lot of problems with this book. I found forty different things through out the book and I could have even missed a few. But really, forty mistakes or inconsistencies in one book? That is absolutely ridiculous like who edited this book and did the proof-reading? Gosh I could not believe this. I would give this book a 2.5 star review because there is no way that I can put it higher when it has so many differences.
First: The font chosen for the chapter numbers I couldn't read so I had no idea what chapter I was on half the time.
Second: In Chapter 3 with Courtney's flashback "all I had to do, was hide away for nine months" why is there a comma there?
Third: on page 14 "once I saw the pristine white hospital like building I knew I was here". Shouldn't it be there instead of here? She knew she was there because she saw the building.
Fourth: on page 15 if Courtney is outside then how does she know that the air smells like cleanliness and disinfectant. There is also a pretense change on this page between past and present.
Fifth: Courtney heaved in deep shallow breaths, the words deep and shallow contradict each other.
Sixth: on page 16 it says Luce jnr. Maybe it's not a mistake but junior is usually just 'jr' and it doesn't have the 'n' in it. This is the first book I have ever read where there is an 'n' in the short form for junior.
Seventh: Chapter 4 page 17 how does an early morning train cause the walls to peel? And then it goes "hot water was a luxury we could not afford, and the hydro would go out at least twice a month". When I was reading that I couldn't understand why there was a comma between the two along with the word 'and'.
Eighth: the pretense changes again on page 18.
Ninth: on chapter 9 page 59 it is Meadows perspective and it says Melissa glares at Phoebe but you can tell by reading the paragraph before that it should be Phoebe who glares at Melissa.
Tenth: Chapter 13 page 86 there isn't technically anything wrong with the sentence but "in here" Melissa replies out of the kitchen just didn't seem right when a better word could be 'calls'.
Eleventh: On page 100 in Chapter 16 Phoebe is sitting beside Melissa and then Melissa sits down beside them?
Twelveth: On that same page and chapter the friends name is Nette and that is the wrong spelling but then it is also spelled Nettie later on.
Thirteenth: On page 101 it should be I remember or I am reminded instead of I'm remembered.
Fourteenth: Page 23 describes Beast's scar as starting behind his right ear and going across his neck but on page 103 his scar starts behind his left ear and then goes down his neck and across his shoulder blade and then onto his chest. Beast also has a hoodie on at the time so how does Meadow know where his scar goes since she has never seen him shirtless?
Fifteenth: Chapter 17 page 109 says Meadow has a square face but in the beginning of the book she is described as having a heart shaped face.
Sixteenth: Chapter 18 page 117 "and the throbbing begins to pulsate". She is talking about her pussy and this is pretty much the same thing when used in this context.
Seventeenth: Tongue is used 7 times in two pages. SEVEN times! It was the same word over and over and over again and just became tedious.
Eighteenth: on Chapter 19 page 123 Melissa talks and then Beast talks in that same paragraph but it should be two separate ones because there are two people talking.
Nineteenth: Page 124 Beast foes to "spin on his heels" but before he does Melissa calls his name as he turns to her even though he hadn't turned around yet.
Twentieth: Chapter 20 page 30. Meadow has deep blue eyes, then she has baby blue eyes and now her eyes are described as blue with a green hue on this page.
Twenty-first: Page 139 'Phoebe asks her level of crazy a an all time high' there should be a comma after asks.
Twenty-second: Page 140 'Beast and I are very early days' reading that part of the sentence is just awkward.
Twenty-third: Chapter 23 page 160 who sleeps with a condom in their pocket? That is just weird.
Twenty-fourth: Same chapter page 163, "really?" I ask eyebrows raised. I think there should be a comma after the word ask or the word with after the word ask.
Twenty-fifth: After Hella talks but before Beast slaps him there should be a paragraph change on page 164.
Twenty-sixth: Page 166 saying sausage meat is redundant. Sausage is meat you don't need to tell the reader that.
Twenty-seventh: Same page it says Meadow stand up and speaks to Hella. Why is that two separate paragraphs?
Twenty-eighth: Page 168 'he shrugs his jaw flexing' there should be a comma or the word and between shrugs and his.
Twenty-ninth: Chapter 24 page 178 "I don't know why?" it isn't a question so there shouldn't be a question mark.
Thirtieth: Chapter 25 page 189 Meadows laughing stops and the next paragraph stops again?
Thirty-first: Same page 'beast stalking to us, shoulders...' the sentence seems awkward to me.
Thirty-second: In chapter 12 on page 77 we are told that Beast is the International President of the Devils Own and then on page 189 in chapter 25 he is only the National President?
Thirty-third: Chapter 25 page 196 he words fuck, shouldn't it be 'mouths the word fuck'?
Thirty-fourth: Page 199 Meadow puts on fighting gloves and then Beast entwines their fingers. It should be clarified that they are finger-less fighting gloves because when I first read this I pictured her wearing the ones that completely cover your hands.
Thirty-fifth: Page 203 "we'll come back tonight and shot some arrows" it should be shoot instead of shot.
Thirty-sixth: Chapter 26 page 205 'I hate confrontation, but if someone hit me or came at me, I wouldn't back down'. There is no reason for these commas.
Thirty-seventh: Page 213 Beast has his skull bike mask on so how can he suck her nipples through the mask?
Thirty-eighth: On page 205 Shelby is a brunette and then on page 227 her hair is mouse blonde.
Thirty-ninth: Chapter 34 page 273 they didn't lose Nyx in the explosion that took Courtney they lost him before the explosion when Beast traded himself for the club.
Fortieth: Same page it says 'from inside an dark' it should be 'a' not 'an'.
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